Help me word a card

[MacMacMoo]

Our son was suppose to be born at the beginning of March. Two weeks before I was due our son was stillborn. Since then I've been making gowns and blankets to give to my hospital.

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(an idea of scale the hooded blanket is 12 inch square)

The first batch I made I stipulated that I wanted them used exclusively for babies that were stillborn or will pass away shortly after birth. The card I included with each item read: "Hand smocked gown made with love in memory of Matthew. A moment in our hands. Forever in our hearts."

I'm making a second batch of items and I'm not putting any exclusion. More than likely, most of the items will end up in the NICU where the babies have a chance to long wonderful lives. I feel hesitant to included the same card as last time. The card itself is perfect from my stand point since it says what I want it to say. However I feel that from a recipients point of few it could be better.

Any suggestions?

EDIT: Thank you all for your condolences.
For the second batch would dropping the "hands/hearts" part and changing "in memory of" to "in honor of" make it better?

[lmh2402]

i'm so very sorry for your loss

what a beautiful and generous gift you are giving to so many families

i personally think the card reads perfectly - this your gift, coming from your heart, and honoring your son.

i think the sentiment is perfectly worded

[sariana]

I am so, so sorry for your loss.

What you are doing is wonderful. My son was born early and was in the NICU for 2 1/2 weeks. I would have felt honored and blessed for him to receive a gift with a card worded exactly as you have written it.

[mamicka]

I got teary reading that. What an awesome gesture. I think your card is perfectly fitting. Bless you.

[malphy]

I am terribly sorry for your loss.

I think what you are doing is beautiful and perfect as is.

[edurnemk]

I'm so sorry for your loss.

I would not change a single word. It seems beautiful to me.

[elizabethkott]

I'm so very sorry for your loss.
I think that the gowns are as beautiful as the sentiment behind their creation, which is expressed perfectly in what you wrote.

[TwinFoxes]

I'm so terribly sorry for your loss. Your generosity is touching.

My babies were in the NICU for almost 11 weeks. I would have appreciated your gift. But I think your instinct is right about the card. It was very touch and go, especially with D. The last thing I would have wanted was a reminder of a bad outcome. Others may disagree with me, but it was a very rough time for me. (But nothing compared to what you must have gone through :hug: ). I think you are amazingly kind to be thinking of the feelings of others.

I don't really have a suggestion. Maybe something about small blessings? Or "Handsmocked with love by Matthew's Mother?"

Your kindness is amazing.

[Momof3Labs]

I'm so, so sorry for your loss.

[julevizamom]

This touched me in a way I can't describe. I myself delivered a stillborn son in November of '07. And I am amazed and so moved that you are able to funnel your sadness into such a positive gesture.

I think your wording on the first is absolutely perfect. For the second (the NICU babies), I can understand what the PP said about not wanting to think about negative outcomes. Maybe something like "Hand smocked gown made for your beautiful baby by Matthew's mommy. May he/she have a beautiful life."

[teedeedee]

I don't have any advice for the wording, but I too wanted to wanted to give my condolences. Your generosity will touch so many. I hope you find much comfort in that. You will be in my prayers.

[ewpmsw]

I'm so very sorry for your loss. I wouldn't change a bit of the wording, it's perfect as is. What a beautiful gift, mama.

[bigpassport]

So sorry for your loss. How heartbreaking.

The gowns look like little angels.

I agree with the PPs who said the card is perfect for the first batch, but maybe not the second batch. I think something like "Hand smocked for your angel with love" or something to that effect would be touching for a LO in NICU.

[mom2ethan]

I am so very sorry for your loss. These are such beautiful gifts. I think the rewording you suggested at the bottom of your first post is perfect.

[boogiemomz]

so very sorry for the loss of matthew; i cannot imagine the pain you feel. what a beautiful gesture to turn that into such a kindness to others who are suffering.

[BelleoftheBallFlagstaff]

I got teary reading that. What an awesome gesture. I think your card is perfectly fitting. Bless you.

:yeahthat: So sorry for you loss. :grouphug:

[niccig]

Such beautiful gowns. :grouphug: for the loss of Matthew.

[NancyJ_redo]

I'm so very sorry for your loss. I wouldn't change a bit of the wording, it's perfect as is. What a beautiful gift, mama.

:yeahthat: Hugs to you :grouphug:

[jgenie]

I'm so, so sorry for your loss.

I think your change in wording would be fine.

[Ceepa]

I'm so sorry for your loss. Your gesture to the babies at the hospital is beautiful and touching. :hug: Your family is in my prayers.